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For hours
which felt
so long
as days,
we drove
through the
land of
old cathedrals.
We didn't
speak
nor look
at each other.
Didn't care
any longer
than we
had to
and that
was,sadly,
not long.
We left
our love
at the
last stop,
last station,
last attraction
was no
attraction.
We're weary.
We're lost.
No map
for the way
we feel.
For hours...
Must return
for one
last night...

Why so gloomy? Love of mine...
The sun will set.
The stars will shine.
No use to speak of death and doom
beneath this pale, seductive moon.
An older poem originally written in German but reworked so many times that the rhyme in English began to sound ludicrous. So, we now have a free verse of sorts - this dying relationship from long ago did seem to deserve a little rhyme at the end.
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BelovedRain Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student Digital Artist
QwQ awww. . . I really like the 5 ending lines:la: I'm sorry to hear about the relationship though O^O I think it deserved that ending aswell =w=
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
Thank you for reading. I appreciate! :)
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Hattie5v5 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
It's written beautifully, I love the sad weary feeling you get from it but that it still feels so thoughtful :)
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
Oh, thank you! Next time, less sad poem, I hope! :)
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Hattie5v5 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
:iconchuwyplz: Yay, I can't wait, you always write such beautiful poetry :iconsbg-crewstock:
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
thank you:)
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Hattie5v5 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012
:iconeweplz: You're welcome
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Vikingmaid Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Student General Artist
you write sad! you not sad, right?
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Just a poem. I'm OK.
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Vikingmaid Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Student General Artist
OK
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La--Boheme Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
It's really wonderful! I love it, the last paragraph is especially profound, very beautiful :heart:
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:icongudrun355:
GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Thank you very much! Both for reading and your kind comment! :iconflowerplz:
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:iconla--boheme:
La--Boheme Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Aw always my pleasure! :hug::heart:
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:icongudrun355:
GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
:iconbigheartplz:
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dreamingshadow18 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice. You always have such a thoughtful writing style.
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Oh thank you very much, poet guy! :)
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bewareofthesnail Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Love it! So sad and beautiful at the same time... And so evocative! Really lovely.
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:icongudrun355:
GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Thanks so very much! Next time, a not-so-sad piece...:thanks:
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DasBlondeBiest Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
This is so sad, but I love it nonetheless....
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:icongudrun355:
GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Thank you very much. Sad poems -oh well! :D
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andrekosslick Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It is much nightmare and passionate love in the picture of the words. A moon gives light in the church of the love for a short moment. But it is prayer and funeral in one. For the light of the love is cold like death. And only a mirror of the love to the lie. The last road will be go to the abyss.
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Thanks so much for your poetical and true interpretation of my poem. I really love your mirror metaphor because it lends much insight into my intentions with this one. Thanks again for reading, my wonderful friend.:love: :thanks:
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andrekosslick Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You dear woman of the word sculptures.
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
You dear Meister of the landscapes.
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WolfandMoon Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Well done, this reminds me of some of the people I used to know though my life. :)
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:icongudrun355:
GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Thank you for reading and for your comment. (Nothing worse than traveling with someone who's not talking to you...) Thanks again! :)
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WolfandMoon Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Yeah I know! :)
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:icongudrun355:
GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
haha It happened to me a few times at least! lol
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Denys-Roque Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i really admire your mind!!! :love:,
because i cant write beautiful things like you
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Thank you so much. You create lovely art wich is so much more lasting than mere words. :)
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, the last stanza is AMAZİNG I just love that part :love:
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
I wanted to have ryhme throughout but because it is a translation, the meaning would have been too much changed. Thank you so much for your nice comment and for reading. :)
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I understand :nod:
Always my pleasure :hug:
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
thanks again. :hug:
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GIR9942 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I like it, especially the little rhyme at the end :)
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:icongudrun355:
GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Thanks so much! :)
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GIR9942 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome :hug:
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