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For hours
which felt
so long
as days,
we drove
through the
land of
old cathedrals.
We didn't
speak
nor look
at each other.
Didn't care
any longer
than we
had to
and that
was,sadly,
not long.
We left
our love
at the
last stop,
last station,
last attraction
was no
attraction.
We're weary.
We're lost.
No map
for the way
we feel.
For hours...
Must return
for one
last night...

Why so gloomy? Love of mine...
The sun will set.
The stars will shine.
No use to speak of death and doom
beneath this pale, seductive moon.
An older poem originally written in German but reworked so many times that the rhyme in English began to sound ludicrous. So, we now have a free verse of sorts - this dying relationship from long ago did seem to deserve a little rhyme at the end.
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BelovedRain Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student Digital Artist
QwQ awww. . . I really like the 5 ending lines:la: I'm sorry to hear about the relationship though O^O I think it deserved that ending aswell =w=
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012
Thank you for reading. I appreciate! :)
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Hattie5v5 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
It's written beautifully, I love the sad weary feeling you get from it but that it still feels so thoughtful :)
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
Oh, thank you! Next time, less sad poem, I hope! :)
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Hattie5v5 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
:iconchuwyplz: Yay, I can't wait, you always write such beautiful poetry :iconsbg-crewstock:
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012
thank you:)
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Hattie5v5 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012
:iconeweplz: You're welcome
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Vikingmaid Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Student General Artist
you write sad! you not sad, right?
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GUDRUN355 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012
Just a poem. I'm OK.
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Vikingmaid Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Student General Artist
OK
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